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New Business website

Post by Coin Operated Group »

Hi Guys,

new website up and running if you wanted a nosey

www.slaterandreeves.co.uk

Mwww.slaterandreevescatering.co.uk

feedback would be appreciated

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Re: New Business website

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Looks the business mate as I said to you before .....got well shot of tired image of Grey Court Catering.....who would choose that name in the first place !

Much easier to sell business to business
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Re: New Business website

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Just seen a typo....on About page at the bottom..... check spelling of electronically
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Re: New Business website

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Which page gav?

Oh and thanks for the feedback . 1 out of 600
members lol
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Re: New Business website

Post by Mark@YorVend »

Hi MIke,
Nice website design, did you do it yourself or use a designer?

Just a couple of things: Under the vending machine section the last line of the second paragraph needs looking at! You used the operated word operated. Also, I would use the word 'artisan' to describe your bread as it's the latest buzz word for fresh food! But perhaps just use the word 'water' instead of 'aqua' as it just sounds pretentious!!

Really good site though!

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Thanks mark , will have a look at those errors.

I had a guy do the site for me , and who is this mike guy ?lol
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On About Page Matt
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Re: New Business website

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I've no idea why I keep calling you mike... would it not be easier for you to change your name for me? :lol:
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Re: New Business website

Post by Snackmore »

Looks good Mike

He he
Steve

Snackmore Vending

Fully managed vending services

Drinks | Snacks | Sweets | Toys | Rides | Washroom

www.snackmore.co.uk 

 

 
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Re: New Business website

Post by PGBrew »

Hi Matt,

Great website, but I think you should get a professional to look over the text:

Too many negatives eg 'we are not a sandwich shop'

Too many repetitions: 'we can offer operated a fully operated service' 'Expertly sourced-----------who roast them expertly' 'Expertly' is the most commonly used word.

You say you guarantee 'Fast and free delivery' but it is subject to how much you order and location - that's not a guarantee.

'Try prospective business and you will benefit from an impressive turnover' does'nt make sense.

'Birmingham based branch' sounds like a regional location but no other branches are mentioned?

Get rid of 'rear of' in your address sounds like a back street location. many statements just don't make sense, grammar is everything in the corporate marketplace. I would suggest the text is re-written. Your business will be judged on it.

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